I'm so sorry, Daniel. I lost my father to gliobastoma, and so we have shared some of life's most disturbing experiences.

As you may have seen among the research docs, the loss of a sibling is a surprisingly frequent motivator in setting people on the lifetime path of research against the disease that caused the death. This draft suggests that you might be inclined by your own tragic experience to develop your practice along lines that intersect in the funding and regulatory approval of pediatric oncology R&D. In that case, the route to improvement is to bring the draft from the past into the future, from showing how you came by the mission to describing how you plan to educate yourself to perform it.

The first step is to outline what you need to learn, the catalog of questions that represent what you don't know about your future practice. The next is to define the network you need to build, that is, the people you need to meet. Along the way, compiling those questions involves discovering sources, reading about both what and who. That means building your own learning infrastructure, from bibliography to Rolodex. Your next draft should be about how you intend to do that.