This draft seems to me to have served well the job of bringing you to the point of departure for the next draft. That's often what good first drafts do. You've told well the story of how you came by your questions. You can compress that account significantly, and by removing what can be squeezed out you have space to tilt the draft not in the direction of completely open-ended questions, but towards the beginning of answers. Does seeking fairness mean a job lawyering for the CFPB, or the New York State Department of Financial Services? Might it be investor protection litigation? Using the base of understanding you've communicated well here to ground your imagination about what forms of practice might suit you would make this better for the writer, but also more effective in reaching the readers who are your colleagues here.