Law in Contemporary Society

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The Kind of Lawyer I Want To Be

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 I don't yet know what I want to do with my degree. However, I have realized now, more than ever, that I want to affect positive change in the world. Not only that I want to, but that I HAVE to—because I am no longer content to sit back and hope that somebody else does it for me.
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As with the first essay, the problem with this draft is in making the connection between your record of personal experience and the ideas the essay is helping the reader take away. Here we are shown your feeling of identity dislocation adjusting to the culture of the law school, followed by an evocation of your panic when you learn your sisters have been in danger. The reader is very likely to sympathize with these feelings. But your goal is to evoke more than sympathy, and the ideas you mean to communicate are apparently more elusive. The goal in revision should be to link together more closely the fact that certain life experiences have happened to you, and the ideas you are currently entertaining about how to practice your chosen profession.

 
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