Law in Contemporary Society

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Reconciliation of Freedom and the State in 2016

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Why make a citation list in a web document? Make links that will help the reader use your references.

The first thing to be done to improve the next draft is to take a portion of this material that can actually be written about in 1,000 words. If you have to go from defining the state to Bernie Sanders' campaign in that space, you will not be able to make coherent sense.

Deciding how to confine your questions also means coming up with the one most important absence in the current draft: a clearly-stated theme. That's what will go in the first paragraph of the next draft, tightly-stated enough that the reader can understand precisely what idea the subsequent paragraphs are developing. That development, which also involves dealing with obvious counterarguments or objections, would be followed by a conclusion that allows the reader to see how she can carry your idea can further for herself.

 
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