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  • This is an interesting, complex, and effective edit. You've basically taken the "big edit" route here, and begun by stripping the draft down to its core insight and its immediate purpose. you've reimagined the draft around those elements, and written essentially a new version to achieve the purpose given the insight. In doing so, of course, you took away from the draft its personal and anxiety-ridden quality, which operates to the advantage of intellectual coherence, as we both knew it would, but also took its original author pretty much out of the picture. The cost of its integration was its depersonalization. That's not a flaw in your edit: that was the nature of the draft, which was a deeply-felt jumping off point for a serious and courageous work of personal examination. I think you've done an excellent job showing what can be made of the draft in another direction.

  • I am, however, dubious about the idea that people are reluctant to dissociate. They are reluctant to think of themselves as dissociating, I will grant you. But that leads to a very different analysis.
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