Personal Intro

<-- I've adjusted the font from default to reflect two "personal" associations which I here assume for "personal" reasons. First, I associate "personal" with informal. Second, I associate serifed fonts with formal and sans-serifed fonts with informal. The deduction from these propositions is evident. -->

That for which law school is likely necessary and hopefully sufficient: I want to get the ability to conscript the law—that is, to work with and within it to achieve desirable outcomes for myself individually and for society at large in relation to my values.

You are at your most precise in your comment about fonts. (Not your most accurate, however, because given cascading style sheets, you can't really associate anything with a font, because you don't know what font the user is reading with, even if you think you've defined the answer in the HTML you wrote.) You are somewhat less precise but still clear about your desire to stop teaching. But you are entirely imprecise with respect to what you want from law school. (Using the law to achieve desirable outcomes for yourself and your society in relation to your values could not be more generic if it tried, don't you think?)

In my view, the way to improve the draft is to remove the extraneous and concentrate on the central. Try starting with a sentence addressing the question directly and go on from there.