Humility and Humanity: The Legal Leverage of the Unimportant

You might want to distinguish between lawyers being important people and lawyers achieving amazing things. One does not have to be the center of attention in order for an amazing thing to come to pass.

You could make this writing tighter. Look at the second and third paragraphs for places to divide them, and ways to say everything they say using fewer words.

Substantively, you have again produced a subtle and effective synthesis of the material you were given, making it your own. The idea you are creating is the idea of your practice. It is not specific enough yet to be buildable. It doesn't need to be. Initial plans will be sketched out in the next two years. Then you will begin having a practice, that is, a process of learning, adapting, exploring that should last a valuable lifetime.