Humans are Hominid Primates. Hominid Primates Believe What They See And Imagine What They Hear.

This is fine work. It needs unification. You are writing about the consequences and ramifications of one idea, which happens to be my Second Law of Social Psychology for Lawyers. But the Jersey Devil, the living legend that was Harriet Tubman and the body cameras of the early 21st century paramilitary police are relevant illustrations that take up too much space and detract from the unity that is the draft's architectural ambition. They need to be presented lucidly in their essentials, perhaps supplemented by other ways in which making things happen in society using words triggers imagination through story-telling and acted drama. From Arnold to Leff to Simpson we read works that might contain other useful examples that can be invoked in very few words. I think the fulfillment of the effort ilies in pulling the skein more tightly together, so as to emphasize the richness of your single idea once it has been orchestrated as you choose.