You needed to take more seriously my advice to cut hard. This draft is still blowsy as the first was. It can be hard to "kill our darlings" when we edit our own work, but that's a crucial part of training our writing, shaping it to the purpose, as lawyers' words must be.

How to learn better listening is still undiscussed, even though it is really your subject. Awareness, evaluation, memory, recording—all the critical components of lawyers' listening are open to your inquiry. Empathy can be crucial to awareness, though not for all forms of good listening, and not always. There was more you might have made of that. All the substantive progress demands space, however, which was why the hard edit was so necessary.