Law in Contemporary Society

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From Sundays to a Practice

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 Here’s what I know now: I want to be a defense attorney, I want to help, and I want to join my grandmother again some Sundays. Now, I need to figure out how.
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The best route to improvement, in my view, is compression. Your writing about your family is the heart of your essay, but you are repetitive. Look at the two sentences that start the next to last paragraph.

Once you have tightened your family memoir to its essentials, you will have 400 words to address the next question, the real one, with which the current draft ends. The figuring out is not that hard, but it begins with your exercise of imagination.

 
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