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Ice-Water, Digital Distribution, and Social Costs

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 I would suggest that your essay is fine and addresses some valid problems and costs associated with restricted distribution and that part can stand on its own. However, if so, I would alter the opening section so that you do not imply that you are going to address issues of incentive and control; or, alternatively I believe it would be a stronger essay if you do want to address those issues to more fully develop why they are not necessary or how substitutes for restricted distribution to provide for such incentive and control could be accomplished. If your thesis is that incentive and control would be reduced in a free distribution model but the benefits derived from such model would outweigh those costs I would like to see that drawn out a little more clearly as well.
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>		Brett and Dana,

Thanks for your comments. I think the two of you are right that the way I introduce this topic leaves a bit to be desired, and that a more focused approach would be useful to the reader. Dana - the part about listening to music at home is there to try demonstrate briefly how valuable I find writings and music. I put it in to try to build agreement with skeptical readers. I am going to explore other ways of achieving this, so I would appreciate your comments on my next revision once I've finished it.

-- JustinColannino - 23 Nov 2009

 
 
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