Internet Shutdowns: How Governments Pull the Plug on Human Rights

I don't disagree with anything you have said here. The rhetoric is strong, but also familiar. The most important part of the next draft will revolve around your idea, rather than other peoples' contributions. Put your voice first, saying what you have new to say from the outset, so that the rest of the context can take up less of the space than it takes here.

I'm not sure I know what your thoughts are, because the current draft is too modest about them. But it does seem to me that you can more clearly address the central problem the current draft identifies. There's nothing unlawful about the extensive use of shutdowns in India, because the law is exhaustively supportive of executive authority. Offering human rights objections to a course of action specifically made lawful domestically works only to the extent that there are significant supranational enforcement possibilities. This is not quite true in Europe, as the Polish and Hungarian situations with respect to rule of law enforcement in the EU show. Nowhere else is it even close to true. What role can non-Indian fora play in enjoining or interfering with activity which is made lawful by Indian legislation?

This is the primary puzzle, as you show. But your rhetoric doesn't address it. The next draft should.